Etched in My Mind for All Time
Etched in my mind
You were 'one of a kind'
That phrase now kills
As my emotion it spills
From the depth of despair
What a hopeless affair
I was warned of your charm
And thought nought of harm
When you swept me away
With that haughty display
Of high minded intelligence
And obvious independence
I was smitten and taken in
Yes! you can call it a sin
To be so all consumed, by
No ordinary guy
From the very start
You captured my heart
I was at your beck and call
Not even a fall
Could lesson your grip
I considered a whip
But alas I could not
Best to leave you to trot
Rather than hold you in reign
Because all was in vane
You had a mind of your own
More wild oats to be sown
I was just your money tree
You had no thought for me
It was a fateful rainy day
As I remember well that May
Breaking down the door
As the thunder started to roar
Unusual for you to race
From your secure and cosy space
I found you many hours later
But you were no traitor
As you lay down in your peace
I knew I had to release
The bond I had felt and I so bereft
Because I was now left
By you my gallant steed
I loved you true, indeed
A stake through your hoof it was dire
You went down in that quagmire
That sight forever, etched in my mind
I will always love you, my 'one of a kind'.
Milli 2008-07-12
Based on a True Story and In memory of a friend’s beautiful horse who accidently died when a broken toy, which was left in the horse paddock, became a stake piercing the hoof and a main blood vessel, of this great animal's foot.
Consequently it died from blood loss before being found. Sorry this was a sad one this week.
You have wriiten a tribute of love for your dear horse. It is sooo sad, it made me cry.
ReplyDeleteSylvie dear it was not my own horse however I felt much empathy for the lady whose horse it was. You know horses command from their owners because they are such proud beasts and those pony girls and boys just adore their charges. Thanks so much for your very sweet and heartfelt comment. Hugs from Milli.
ReplyDeleteThank You too JR and your post was wonderful.
ReplyDeleteIt is sad. I was enthralled the whole way through and in the end was amazed it was a horse. What a woeful thing to happen. This is wonderful Milli.
ReplyDeleteyou always amaze me and the best part it's never predictable!
ReplyDeleteanother great write from you...love your style
Thanks Ronnie I must admit to holding the suspense for as long as I could with innuendo before announcing that it was a Horse.
ReplyDeleteDanette unpredictable I hope is good?
ReplyDeleteThank you for your encouraging comment.
First I thought it was a lover and to find it was a horse filled me with grief as the eyes of a horse looks into one's soul. He wasn't your horse but he had looked at you, imparted his message and with it his trust. I repeat, you get to me Milli.
ReplyDeletethat is a suspenseful poem, I would never had thought it was a horse...great one...take care and god bless.
ReplyDeleteyou wrote a very dynamic piece. I was so engrossed. Most excellent. What a great writer you are.. kudos. ZeeZee
ReplyDeleteThis is such a touching narration.. For a while I thought it was a haughty lover. Until on the word "steed" did my eyes hover. The lose of a beloved steed, In the heart leaves a painful seed. I hope your friend is feeling better now, As her heart heals, with another Horse's Love.
ReplyDeleteOh my word! What a horrible way to die!
ReplyDeleteIt didn't sound like a horse until the end. Reminds me of a novella by D.H. lawrence called St. Maur.
Wow, I think at first it was a love lost, and then realized it WAS love lost,...just a different kind of live. Good going.
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Fabulous work...so many metaphors. Sad but bold daring and true. http://barb4sun.multiply.com/journal/item/404/CREATIVE_CHALLENGE...ETCHED_IN_MY_MIND
ReplyDeleteI'm in tears here I'm at a true loss for words....beautifully written
ReplyDeletebeautifully written darlin...........beautiful.........................
ReplyDeleteGot me too. I'm sorry for the horse. Does this make me a bad person? If it was a cheating lover not sure I'd have the same feelings as I do the horse.
ReplyDeleteheck no Friggincrazy. Not at all. I wrote about the bond felt between a horse lover and how the horse reciprocates. As i said earlier I used innuendo in the beginning because it can be like a love affair between the horse owner and their steed.
ReplyDeleteWhat you said here Bill touched my heart.
ReplyDeleteTina the poem does have suspense and i thank you for your visit.
ReplyDeleteGrant I am very glad that you enjoyed the poem. Sad it is indeed.
Zee Zee and you write an inspiring comment too.
Thanks Rashmi for your wonderful touch here too and maybe another horse who knows.
Kittigory I wi need to read St Maur.
Thanks Vickie so very much.
Barb how wonderful that you found my poem this way. Fantastic.
Toni and Peter you are both wonderful and I thank you both dearly.
ReplyDeleteI also thought of a partnership that was not to be, and it was but not the "human" kind. Very moving poem and when you know the truth behind it all, it hurts even more. Beautiful ode to the memory of the horse.
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Loved the semblance here, the rhyming was near perfect and the tribute excellant. I knew early on what this would be about (a horse that is), but not the horse's subsequent ending. Terribly sad for this to have had happen.
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oh, for a moment i thought it was a tragic love story between man and woman. i became so engrossed with the sorrow .... great poem!
ReplyDeleteBrilliant it is, sadness with love and memory.
ReplyDeleteI wish to thank everyone who stopped by to either comment or read my entry here. Not an easy read or for that matter an easy write. let's see what the next challenge presents us with?
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