If! With Apologies to E. E. Cummings. Reviving My Poem Today.
IF
If freckles were lovely, and day was night, And measles were nice and a lie warn't a lie, Life would be delight,- But things couldn't go right For in such a sad plight I wouldn't be I.
If earth was heaven, and now was hence, And past was present, and false was true, There might be some sense But I'd be in suspense For on such a pretense You wouldn't be you.
If fear was plucky, and globes were square, And dirt was cleanly and tears were glee Things would seem fair,- Yet they'd all despair, For if here was there We wouldn't be we.
ee cummings
' IF '
With apologies to E E Cummings
If frogs were lovely and full of delight and a creation was not a creation And a cell did not divide? Life would be nothing, is that not right? For in such a sad plight, I would not be I
If moonbeams could heal, a hearts loneliness And past was representing it's self to be true I might make some sense But nothing is that intense and in such suspense You would not be you
If near was lucky and stars were square and gardens grew gladly with no help from the bee Things would seem without a care yet they would all become aware that time is irrelevant And we are we
As adapted by 'Milli' and actually Written By Me...Enjoy!
your visit and comment at my WP is a source of such inspiration for me to march on.you just get your vibration adjusted to the need as you read. i knew you will love the music behind. it was very courteous of you to asked for apology to take the thread and weave around "IF". the author would have really said "you have grasped the exact musk fragrance which i radiated though the crowd did see the flower but not enjoyed the fragrance" you not only enjoyed the fragrance but made known the fragrance by elaboration
Cummings is my FAVORITE poet! To me his style is brilliant. That said though, you SHOULDN'T apologize LOL. Your poem is just, if not a bit more ;o), brilliant than his.
I Loved this when you posted it before and I still love it now.
ReplyDeleteA nice treat you bring before us, I did chuckle. This is a treat to read. Thank you so much (M'Lady) Milli 8=)
ReplyDeleteThis was so upbeat! I enjoyed it very much.
ReplyDeletei loved this milli :) (notice how i wrote in cummings style??)
ReplyDeleteYou did a superb job carrying on the pattern. Cummings should apologize to YOU, I like yours better!!!
Excellent!
ee sans souci
your visit and comment at my WP is a source of such inspiration for me to march on.you just get your vibration adjusted to the need as you read. i knew you will love the music behind.
ReplyDeleteit was very courteous of you to asked for apology to take the thread and weave around "IF". the author would have really said "you have grasped the exact musk fragrance which i radiated though the crowd did see the flower but not enjoyed the fragrance" you not only enjoyed the fragrance but made known the fragrance by elaboration
be blessed
Haha very cool and I'm sure he wouldn't mind.
ReplyDeleteyup, I like the adapted version........ok ..... the original one too.........lol
ReplyDeleteLovely. Great adaptation, Milli!
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ee is the man.... playing with his ideas and thoughts is fun... you did good girl....
ReplyDeleteCummings is my FAVORITE poet! To me his style is brilliant. That said though, you SHOULDN'T apologize LOL. Your poem is just, if not a bit more ;o), brilliant than his.
ReplyDeleteVERY nicely done!
What a great idea! How smart you are!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your visit.
I like your adaptation even better! What? Is that heresy???
ReplyDeleteCount me as liking it better too and I'm a huger fan of this poet
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I like your version better too... if only moonbeams could heal a heart's loneliness...oh the walk I would take in the moonlight... delightful! -janeen
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