Thursday, November 2, 2006

If! With Apologies to E. E. Cummings. Reviving My Poem Today.

 
 
IF

 

If freckles were lovely, and day was night,
And measles were nice and a lie warn't a lie,
     Life would be delight,-
     But things couldn't go right     
     For in such a sad plight
I wouldn't be I.

If earth was heaven, and now was hence,
And past was present, and false was true,
     There might be some sense     
     But I'd be in suspense
     For on such a pretense
You wouldn't be you.

If fear was plucky, and globes were square,
And dirt was cleanly and tears were glee
     Things would seem fair,-
     Yet they'd all despair,
     For if here was there
We wouldn't be we.

ee cummings

 

' IF ' 

With apologies to E E Cummings 

If frogs were lovely and full of delight
and a creation was not a creation
And a cell did not divide?
Life would be nothing, is that not right?
For in such a sad plight,
I would not be I

If moonbeams could heal,
a hearts loneliness
And past was representing it's self to be true
I might make some sense
But nothing is that intense
and in such suspense
You would not be you

If near was lucky
and stars were square
and gardens grew gladly
with no help from the bee
Things would seem without a care
yet they would all become aware
that time is irrelevant
And we are we

As adapted by  'Milli'  and actually Written
By M
e...Enjoy!

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14 comments:

  1. I Loved this when you posted it before and I still love it now.

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  2. A nice treat you bring before us, I did chuckle. This is a treat to read. Thank you so much (M'Lady) Milli 8=)

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  3. This was so upbeat! I enjoyed it very much.

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  4. i loved this milli :) (notice how i wrote in cummings style??)

    You did a superb job carrying on the pattern. Cummings should apologize to YOU, I like yours better!!!
    Excellent!
    ee sans souci

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  5. your visit and comment at my WP is a source of such inspiration for me to march on.you just get your vibration adjusted to the need as you read. i knew you will love the music behind.
    it was very courteous of you to asked for apology to take the thread and weave around "IF". the author would have really said "you have grasped the exact musk fragrance which i radiated though the crowd did see the flower but not enjoyed the fragrance" you not only enjoyed the fragrance but made known the fragrance by elaboration

    be blessed

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  6. Haha very cool and I'm sure he wouldn't mind.

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  7. yup, I like the adapted version........ok ..... the original one too.........lol

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  8. ee is the man.... playing with his ideas and thoughts is fun... you did good girl....

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  9. Cummings is my FAVORITE poet! To me his style is brilliant. That said though, you SHOULDN'T apologize LOL. Your poem is just, if not a bit more ;o), brilliant than his.

    VERY nicely done!

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  10. What a great idea! How smart you are!

    Thanks for your visit.

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  11. I like your adaptation even better! What? Is that heresy???

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  12. Count me as liking it better too and I'm a huger fan of this poet
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  13. I like your version better too... if only moonbeams could heal a heart's loneliness...oh the walk I would take in the moonlight... delightful! -janeen

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