Creative Challenge.
Kites
Kites are fun
Fun because You See
See, first there was one
One coloured pink and very pretty
Pretty while it flew ever so high
High! as another kite came into my view
My view yes and now there are two
Two then another
Another kite in the sky
Sky filling fast as now, there are three
Three kites altogether gracefully Fly
Fly well they do as next comes two more both four and five
Four and Five now rising ever so high
So High In that big vast, cloudy, grey sky.
But Wait....
Look!
Look! Now I see Six!
Six plus one more now that makes
Seven
Seven beautiful Kites reaching into blue heaven
Heaven and you had Better
Better hold them all tight
Tight because a strong wind is now blowing
Blowing them higher Wow! what a sight
A Sight of Seven Colourful kites
Kites soaring across a cloudy sky they go
Go flying as high as any one kite
Kite! yes one Kite could possibly Go.
Milli 11
picturing a a lovely day maybe at the beach flying kites, nice job
ReplyDeleteWhat starts as one becoming many. Nice message!
ReplyDeleteCool !
ReplyDeletefun write
ReplyDeleteIsn't it great how an idea of 'one' becomes many !
Loved it !
Creative Challenge #158 "ONE"
Haven't flown a kite in years. I think that would be so much fun -- if we could find a day when the wind wasn't so strong.
ReplyDeleteOh, so inviting!
ReplyDelete~smile~ .... one is never really just one ... is it! .... You have given perfect words to your picture ... or perhaps the picture seems more because of your words ... can't quite decide!! Great entry!
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Can never have too many kites!! LOL. Great entry :-))
ReplyDeletewhat a pretty bunch of kites, I love how it inspired you, I felt like a child reading a short story
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone for your kind comments. I do intend to share this poem and photo with my grand children.
ReplyDeleteThe photo was taken on open day at my grand daughters school and part of the fun was kite flying.
It turned out to be perfect weather for this fun exercise and although I have only seven of the kites in my photo here, at times there were many more
flying high together. As you can see from ground level they truly were flying at the full length of their strings.
The poem has been written intentionally using the last word at the beginning of the next line. I forgot though what this form of poetry is called. lol.
Can anyone help? It works very well for this type of poem and the poem is best when it is spoken aloud.
This is great! I really enjoyed it. This brought back memories of when my son was a little boy. We combined his two favorite past times by hooking the kite string onto the line from his fishing reel and out the end of the rod. That kite would soar out of site, and it was just like fishing in the sky ... let it run for awhile, then slowly reel it in... then let it take off again.
ReplyDeletePeople would stop and ask what was going on to see a kid standing in the middle of the park holding a fishing rod and reel. When we told them what was happening, they were skeptical, until he would reel in a couple hundred meters of line so the kite was visible again.
The great part was at the end of the day you didn't have to worry about clleaning that fish!
Milli - I love the format of your poem.Is it a formally recognised form or are you the creator? What is this form called?
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful story Tim. Kids are so inventive and so are their mums and dads. I am glad that my poem evoked such delightful memories.
ReplyDeleteLynne I know it is a form of poetry but I can't remember what it is called. If it is some new format which I doubt then, wow, seems I have started a new trend.
ReplyDeleteDid you read it aloud?
So much fun :) xxx
ReplyDeleteTerrific entry...and a lot of thought and work went into this one! Let's go fly a kite.....
ReplyDeletemakes an awesome childrens piece.
ReplyDeleteThank so much Deb. I read it to one of the little ones and he enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Cin.xo
ReplyDeleteOR TWO!!!
ReplyDeletehe he kewl one cumin from a guy who like to fly BIG KITES! LOL......kewl:)...........q
ReplyDeleteOh wow..now that is something I love too.
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