Tuesday, April 19, 2011

Creative Challenge ~ 149 ~ Allure

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Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first
line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
The Peacock
 
Over time your glorious plumage has become most symbolic
As your praises are sung throughout different culture
In present time as well as historic
 Revered by mankind, many folk you allure
 
As your praises are sung throughout different culture
Myth prevails along with sacred writings and semiotics
Revered by mankind, many folk you allure
How much is truth and how much is pure rhetoric
 
 
Myth prevails along with sacred writings and semiotics
In present time as well as historic
Revered by mankind many folk you allure
Over time your glorious plumage has become most symbolic
 
Milli 11

21 comments:

  1. Peacocks....one of my fav birds as it is colorful and I had fallen in love with these winged creatures when I was a small child (approx 4 or 5 year old). i still remember it coming into either our front or backyard and doing a little dance to attract a female peacock somewhere close by. Don't know if it succeded or not....yet it was a pretty sight. Loved the poem and thanks for the explanation. Loved reading it and I would love to give it a try when my muse finally returns. Wishing u a very Happy Easter Milli.

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  2. interesting, I must have slept through that lit class in college

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  3. I am soooo pleased you took the challenge ( of course I took both...LOL )
    a very creative write....and I liked the subject you chose for it...excellent, Milli!

    ( for me, I found the Pantoum style easier then the Kyrielle...but liked the end result on the Kyrielle better. this is the link if you wisht to view it: Creative Challenge #149 "Enticingly, Fragrant Allure "

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  4. You did it! Now, I'm going to have to go and try the pantoum. Oh, dear.
    P.S. Your peacock is absolutely gorgeous!

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  5. Excellent, Milli. Have a Happy Easter!!

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  6. That is a gorgeous peacock, poor thing has to carry around all those pretty feathers lol
    good job on the pantoum!

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  7. Hi Nik I do understand the significance of the beautiful turquoise Peacock to you and your fellow country men. A beautiful bird the male is and I also believe he dances to signify the Monsoon Season there in India. I bet you were armoured at his magnificence when you first saw him as a child. Thank You.

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  8. I have never written one before but I enjoyed the challenge.

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  9. Thanks Linda, it is good to learn something new and you appear to have tackled it well.

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  10. Thanks Virginia...he looks great when he is enlarged and he was a free ranging beauty.

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  11. I am sure they do hold allure for you..Rashmi.
    Me too. Thank you.

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  12. It seems they work to his benefit Danette as the female peahens will attest to. lol thanks.

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  13. You're brave, Milli! You took the challenge in a very beautiful and skilled style! Gorgeous pic of a peacock!
    Thanks for visiting mine.
    Happy Easter!

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  14. Well I followed the rules but got confused so I ended up shaving.
    Bemused by my image, content with the view, I took a backward glance
    Such colours there are seldom seen as I went into a trance
    Mutton looking at lamb and now so stupidly I dance?
    Like a battered Peacock I woo, featherless and fading.
    Buffed and fluffed but my hopes are prevailing.

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  15. LOL..Keep those spirits uplifted there Bill.
    I like your poem it is fantastic.

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  16. Alas they took a dive after breathing in the Air Con cleaner. lol
    Standing outside of the car I found I had not closed the vents.
    Crawled indoors dragging my feathers I felt and looked intoxicated.

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  17. Very nice and clever work. Your use of more complicated syntax and wording is remarkable. Great photo as well.

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  18. Most symbolic indeed, nice one!

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